group: red apples

vi_diem Mon Apr 13, 2009 11:39 am

Group:Red apples
Writing: topic sentense

Member’s work:
1. Đinh Thị Thoả Niềm
1.An ideal job
Business is an ideal job for young people.
2.Study pressure for student
Knowledge too much make pressure for student.
3.Students' autonomy.
Students' autonomy help them developing their social skill.
4.Reading in library.
Reading in library is the best choice for student.
5. Words in pop songs.
Words in pop song are very ỉnteresting.

2. Văn Thị Thuỷ
1. An ideal job.
It’s difficult to find an ideal job for young people.
2. Study pressure for student.
Now, student have to bear a hard study pressure from the teachers.
3 Student’s autonomy
Student’s autonomy will help them active and creative in every actions.
4. Reading in library.
Reading in library is a good habit to improve our knowledge.
5. Words in pop songs.
It is easy to be sensitive to the interesting of words in pop songs.

3. Bùi Thái Hường
1. An ideal job is always eagerly urish for me.
2. Study pressure made some students have to give up studying.
3. Students’ autonomy in thinking will help them develop their creative mind.
4. The habit of reading in library help us to improve our knowledge.

4. Đinh Thị Lịch
1. Guide is an ideal job in thinking of many pupils and students.
2. Having too many subjiects will cause study pressure for students.
3. Student’s autonomy is a decisive factor to their study effect.
4. Reading in library is very useful and suitable to students.
5. the thing which I like best about pop music that is words in pop songs.
5. Hoàng Thị Mơ
1. An ideal job is suitable for your ability.
2. Study of difficulty puts pressure on students.
3.There are several reasons for students decide life themselves.
4. Reading has many advantages in library.
5. Words in pop songs are usually suave.

6. Võ Thị Vi Diễm
1If you are seeking for an ideal job, you must have a dream, ability and love for that job.
2 When you are supplied a scholarship to study abroad, there are many pressures for you.
3 Nowadays, student’s autonomy is out of control of the parents, even society.
4 When you need somewhere quiet, comfortable, interesting condition to reading, library is the best choice for you.
5 It is easy to understand and to remember worlds in pop songs.

vi_diem Sat Apr 18, 2009 10:42 pm

RED APPLES” GROUP

Name: VO THI VI DIEM
TASK 1 (PAGE 50)
1. The bowl of noodle he gave me yesterday has never tasteless like that there was no flavor in it.
2. The startled sound of hunter’s shotgun like frightened warn made whole animal in that forest runway to safe life.
3. In the middle of Nam Quan gorge yesterday there was a tragic accident, two people died immediately under the truck tires
4. There was a dead silence in the classrom when the most strict instructor of my school came into.
5. My printer shaking for a moment, some warning sound and it didn’t work any more.
6. In the burial sacred asmosphere of a kind man, the grow grew restless.
7. Yesterday, I’ve got a comfotable relaxation from a new method of massage in Heaven spa.
8. The rom was in total chaos after the party.
9. Mary, a six years old girl, stamped her food and threw her doll angrily when see her mother go out.
10. The truck was broken down unexpectedly make the driver scrowl vexedly.
TASK 2 (50 & 51)
1. My forehead become feverish, there are paineful and weak in wholle body, I sure I was coming down with flu
2. Yesterday, my school cafeteria sever a strange food, it seems thatg they mujst have flounder sugar and salt,so it
Staste not as same as anything I have ever eat before.
3. A strange throbbing give out from my car, it was broken down here in a strange place.
4. When your economy getgs difficult you shold save every amount of your budget to settle your life.
5. Same young people nowdays are trifling with the Death when driving as fast as possible – their dangerous speed
Seems that unlimited.
Name : VAN THI THUY
TASK 1 (PAGE 50)
1. The lunch wasn’t good for the weight.
2. Yesterday, a bear in the central park zoo ran away when gatekeeper forgot lock the door.
3. In the HN street, an terrible accident occurred on yesterday, it made many people die.
4. Mr wallker, a new instructor was happy when he was come into the convenient room as expectancy.
5. After a long time repaired, the machine still didn’t act so working was delayed.
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7. Swimming helped me relax after a hard-working day.
8. When the just began, the room was cutlered with salvo of opplause and clamour.
9. The habit of children kept in the mouth the objects in our hand.
10. The taxi-driver roar with rage when client didn’t pay enough money.
NAME: HOANG THI MO
TASK 1 (PAGE 50)
1. I had chicken salad for lunch, but It was too salty and hot.
2. The rabbit in Lam Dong Zoo ran away when I stood beside it.
3. Last night, having 2 cars bump each other in An Duong Vuong street.
4. My teacher came into the classrom and said " hello everyone".
5. My machine broke needle yesterday.
6. Fans crowded round the singer hoping to get his autograph more and more crowd.
7. I always listened to music on freetime.
8. The clothes were messy in bedroom.
9. My youngest brother threw toys when he was angry.
10. Taxi-driver was angry beacase passenger's inconsiderate.
TASK 2 (PAGE 50-51)
1. I have headache
My nose is running.
2. The vegetable soup was too salty.
The dressing wasn't hot enough.
3. My car uses more petrol than as usual.
Last night, when I started my car engine, suddenly it was switched off later.
4. You had better ride bike intead of riding motorbike.
You should cut back on spending such as: go shopping,smoke,drink wine and beer.
5. The driver drive too fast.
The driver drink too mch aloohol such as:wine, beer.

Name: DINH THI LICH

HOMEWORK 2:
TASK 6 (page 50):
1. The lunch was not very good.
 The lunch was like a dream about the salt field with dishes which was so salty that it was difficult to swallow.
2. The animal ran away.
 In the evening of frosty winter, the animal leaved my farm that I was without any knowledge.
3. An accident occurred.
=> After the sound of blowing-out, the car staggered to look like a drunk then plunged into abyss.
4. The instructor came into the room.
 I had come the room early so much but when I stepped in, the instructor sat stately there.
5. The machine did not work.
 So much time went by and I tried to start the machine for work but the machine was still sleeping soundly.
6. The crowd grew restless.
 From the ways, the groups of people were hustling to come in crowd at the crossroad and soon, the crossroad was dense with people.
7. I relaxed.
 It was comfortable when I steeped body in the current of natural hot water.
8. The room was cluttered.
 After thieves leaved, Tom’s room was like a refuse dump.
9. The child threw the object.
 The child cried loudly then threw the object in his hand to the door.
10. The driver was angry.
 Looking like a lion, the diver stuck out head outside and stormed noisily the man who was going across the road.

TASK 7 (page 50&51)

1. I could tell I was coming down with flu.
- I often felt sleepy.
- My body was hot and tired.
- I was been headache and sometimes was coughed.
2. The food at the cafeteria was terrible yesterday.
- The soup was very salty.
- Fried chicken was burnt and had uncomfortable smell.
- The dessert of yesterday was also very hard to eat.
3. I had car problems recently.
- I couldn’t start my car two days ago.
- There were series of thud in an engine recently.
- Sometimes, it was switched off an engine while I was driving.
4. When your money gets tight, there era several ways to economize.
- Send them into the bank by cash.
- Buy gold then send them into the bank
- Make a savings-book for yourself.
5. Some people have dangerous driving habits.
- Drive very quickly and carelessly.
- Drive when they have just drunk wine..
- Don’t fasten the safety belt when driving.

Name: Pham Thi Hong Vuong
1 task 1 page 50
1. The food of the lunh was so terrible that I can not eat it.
2. The chamois ran like fly to overcome dangerous animals.
3. An shed blood accident happened in high-way yesterday.
4. The instructor steps in the room sa light as a wind.
5. My sewing machine didn’yt work like lack of a life’s part.
6. The crowd grow restless as leaves drop in a windy autum afternoon.
7. A pop song named “finaly” make me relaxed.
8 . The room was cluttered like a battlefield.
9. Nam shot his robot without regret.
10. The driver shouted becaue of his posser-by attitude.
2 task2 page 50-51
1. I could tell I was coming down with flu.
- I feel heachache
- I didn’t wear hat yesterday afternoon
- I feel very chill
2. The food at the cafeteria was terrible yesterday.
- The soup was too much salt
- vegetable was not fresh enough.
-rice wasn’t well cooked
3. I had car problems recently.
- The light was broken when I came back home last night
- Tires suddenly broken
4. When your money gets tight, there era several ways to economize.
- you can find a part time job
- reduce your every amount of money
5. Some people have dangerous driving habits.
- pass red light
- dropping hands when driving
- driving too fast

Name: Hoang Thi Mo
Name: DINH THI THOA NIEM
1 TASK 1
1. Yesterday, I had lunch in cafeteria where the food is so horrible.
2. Last Monday, I saw a mad dog when he ran in the M.C street.
3. Last month my friend told me a terrible accident, occurred in Le Quy Don street
4. Mr Thanh our instructor cam into the hall quikly.
5. I could’t start up my sewing machine because it was too old to work.
6. people in my village gathered on the temple to pray for a rain but there wasn’t any hope, the crowd grew restlee.
7. when I was stress I relaxed by listen to music.
8. After my birthday party, my house was clutted
9. My younger brother always pens into the kitchen when he was a child.
10. Minh has some problem whith his car, he was so angry
2 TASK 2
1 –I didin’t want to eat anything
- I feel headache
- high temperature
2 _ rice was pasty
_ soup was tasteless
_ meat is too salty
3 _ Sometime I couldn’t start up it
_ the petrol was oozing out of the tank
_ It spend petrol too much
4 _ don’t buy something unessesry
_ only buy vegetable for meal
_ turn off electric light before 11pm
5 _ they drive very fast
_ they carry more than 2 people on a motobike
_ they don’t stop when there is red light

Name: BUI THAI HUONG
TASK 1
1. The lunch was so terrible that my friend vomitted all food.
2. horse, lion, elephant .. ran away as rain and typhoon out of forest fire.
3. An traffic accident which made five people die happened yesterday evening when I was going for a walk with my friends
4. Our instructor always came into the classroom with a smile like sunflower.
5. Some equipment of the machine was fallen, so it didn’t work.
6. The crowd who saw the accident grew fast and restless.
7. After such along time of hard study at university, I went to Paris to relax.
8. My neighbour’s room was so cluttered that it was like blouring up immediately
9. Her child threw his birthday present outside becase he hate it.
10. The driver was so angry that he sinashed the glasses of his car to pieces.
TASK 2
1. – I was so headache that I couldn’t go to school
_ I was very tired because I sneezed so much.
_ I had totake medicine 3 times a day instead of 2 times.
2. vegetable was durty and not well-done
Spoons and chopstricks aren’t clean.
Rice was mixed with noodle
3 The engine was broken dowon
Glasses was painted by children so Ihad to clean
A tire of my car burst when I was driving
4 Buying god is the way to save money
To lodge money in the bank
Reduce bussiness unneccessary everyday
4 To exceed the red light and speed limit
Driving in condition is drunk with alcohol or feeling sleepy.

vi_diem Sat Apr 25, 2009 5:02 pm

RED APPLES GROUP
NAME: VÕ THỊ VI DIỄM
CAUSES OF STRESS AT WORK
There are many causes of stress at work in all kind of people, for all kind of people. First, excessively high workloads make people feel rushed and under too much pressure, another case is that people in sufficient of workloads make people feel that their skill are being undervalue. Second, a lack of interpersonal support or poor wooking relationship leading to a sense of isolation. Third, people arewho are being asked to job for which they are in lack of experience or training make they feel worry too. Finally, lack of control over work activities is some time an important cause of paranoid from work. In summary, all of this reasons eaily lead people into a stressful situation, people should find why they are in a stress work to solve problem to have a comfortable and relax life.

NAME: VAN THI THUY
Learning at college, cope with comletly new enviroment, new method of training, a fast pace of learing, student sometime fall into a stress life by many causes. The task of college is significantly more involve than in high school and it were done with less control of parents and eacher. In addition, many student find themselves studying long, hard hours, they have to staying up lateto study, getting up early for classes. Finally, difficult test and other academic obstacles and the independent enviroment of college learning structure. For all that reasons student should know what are the motives of there stressful life to settle it and study better. L

NAME : BÙI THÁI HƯỜNG
HOMEWORK 3:Writing a paragraph
Topic: Stress at home
Recently, I am often stress because I have to many things to do at home. First of all, I am going to have final term tests, so I have to study hard. Everyday I spend 2 hours learning by heart, 2 hours finding documenteries for my essays and I spend time left studying my limited speciality subjects. Second, my parents now going to bussiness, so I have to do all housework: waahing, tidying up the house, cooking. Moreover, I have to look after my 5-year-old sister,she usually cries. Last, the weather is very hot, that thing makes me cannot study and feel tired. I feel I don’t have enough time to relax and do anything. I must think how I can do all works. Thus, I am stress.

HOMEWORK 3: Writing a paragraph
NAME: DINH THI LICH

Topic: Stress at work

Work is which bring happiness but it also cause many stresses for us. First of all, work always requires very highly for ability, knowledge, nimble in movement and mind, communication… Therefore, we have to try to do not lag behind. That thing makes us tired so much and sometimes we fell it looks like pressure. Furthermore, at the work, everybody often competes to get promotions. Because the position influences to your salary and prestige. In addition, when we go to work, we only know the work. If you don’t have a scientific plan and good methods to work, you will stress and work no effect. However, as for as I know. Solving stress is not too difficult if we know how to work and to relax sensibly.

RED APPLES GROUP
NAME: HOANG THI MO
Homework: write a paragraph
Topic: Stress at school

Nowadays, stress at school is one of pressures make us feel exhausted and disheartened. It is a very common problem, and you find it difficult to overcome. Students have many pressures from their parents, their teachers, and their friends who expect their bright future. Therefore, they always remind themselves “try again”, “try again”. But the troubles with studying still continue. Linda says that: “program is too hard and knowledge is also large”. That is the reasons why I can’t finish my all lessons. For me, the awful thing is that my heart always beat faster as if I already finished a long-distance run, whenever Mr Walker calls me to stand before my class. In addition, it also makes me lose heart because my friends learn so well. I try my best to keep up with them and fell disappointed. Finally, the examinations, tests cause most of my stress. I have dog sleep and loss of appetite. I’m easily angry with anyone. I’m really lack of confidence to cope with pressure at school.

NAME DINH THI THOA NIEM

Stress at work
Mrs.Lan is woman business, she is very successful at her work but she always has stress for three reasons :
First of all, she have a lot of work needs to resolve even she don’t have time eating, sleeping. Second, it’s very difficult if she wants to harmonize between taking care of her family and works well. Moreover, she almost don’t have some holiday as New Year holiday.
Nowaday, stress at work is not only Mrs.Lan but also many businesses.

PHAM THI HONG VUONG Sat Apr 25, 2009 11:27 pm

STRESS AT SCHOOL

There are many reasons to cause stress at school for students. First of all, the program of studying is so many subjects that students are bored. So, they feel tired every time they think about it. Next, the lecture in a class so much knowledge that the students can’t receive. Therefore, they feel stressful. An addition, the teacher is not only students feel serious but also the cause to bring about stress for students if he is too strict. Moreover, stress at school for all of students is the some mood. That is they fear for failing in the examination. For example: in final examination. For that, this thing will make pressure for them. Generally, the reasons cause stress at school for the students to be reasons decrease of result of student’s study. Therefore, we need overcome and restrict that things.

duongthanhphuong Sat May 02, 2009 10:36 am

. 1Learning a new language is like learning to swim.It takes a lot of practice, time, and a great effort.
2. A newly arrived international students face many problem such as: a new culture, the changes of time and weather, especially the digestion of stranger food.
3. Junk food is bad for your health. It not only contains or vitamins but also damages your stomach. People shouldn't eat it.

vi_diem Sat May 02, 2009 9:15 pm

RED APPLES GROUP
NAME VO THI VI DIEM

CORRECT RUN-ON SENTENCES
1. Like starting to learn how to swim, learning a new language take a lot of practice, time and effort.
2. A new abroad student have to adjust himself with new kind of weather, time, culture and strange foods.
3. People shouldn't eat junk foods, which not only contains no vitamins but also bad for health and damage his stomach.

NAME: VAN THI THUY

CORRECT SENTENCES
1. Learning a new language takes a lot of time, practice and effort.
2. Being a new arrived international student, you will have to solve problems in: cope with a new culture, changes of time, weather and new strange food.
3. Junk food, which contains no vitamines and damages your stomach is too bad and shouldn't be used.

RED APPLES GROUP

NAME: DINH THI LICH
HOMEWORK4: Do not write run-on sentence
1. Learning a new-language is like learning to swim it takes a lot of practice and time and it takes a great effort

=> The same learning swim, learning a new language also takes a lot of practice, time and a great effort.

2. A newly arrived international student faces many problems for example he has to cope with a new culture and adapt with the changes of time and weather especially the digestion of strange food.

=> There are many problems for a newly arrived international student such as: a new culture, the changes of time and weather especially the digestion of strange food.

3. Junk food is bad for your health and it also contains no vitamins and it damages your stomach and people shouldn’t eat it.

=> I think people shouldn’t eat junk food because it contains no vitamins and damages our stomach.

NAME DINH THI THOA NIEM

CORRECT RUN-ON SENTENCE

1.Learning a new language is like learning to swim a lot of practice and time and it takes a great effort.

→Learning a new language is like learning to swim, it demands a great effort.

2.A newly arrived international student faces many problems for example he has to cope with a new culture and a dapt with the change of time and weather especially the digestion of strange food.

→A newly arrived international student faces many problems such as: the new culture, the change of time, new weather, strange food.

3.Junk food is bad for your health and it also contains no vitamins and it damages your stomach and people shouldn’t eat it.

→ Junk food is bad for your health and it also contains no vitamins.

NAME BUI THAI HUONG

Rewrite “Run-on sentences”:
1.Learning new languages is like learning to swim because it takes a lot of time and a great effort to pratice.
2. A newly arrived international student has to face many problems such as : a new culture, adapt with the changes of time, weather and especially the digestion o strange food.
3. Junk food is bad for your health because it not only contains no vitamin but also damages your stomach, so people should’nt eat it.

Đinh Thị Thỏa Niềm Sat May 16, 2009 6:54 pm

EVALUATING PARAGRAPH FOR UNITY
Activity
1. A Kindergarten Failure
The numbers of irrelevant sentence: 3,11
3) My family lived in California for three years before we moved to Omaha , Nebraka, where my father was a personal manager for Mutual of Omaha .
11) Since I was go to a parochial shool in the fall, I had not been taken with the other children to meet the first-grade teacher at the public shool.
2. How to Prevent Cheating
The numbers of irrelevant sentence: 4,5
4) Students will check with their friends to find out, for example, what was on Dr.Thompson’s biology final last term.
5) They may event manage to find a copy of the test itself, “accidentally” not turned in by a former student of Dr.Thompson’s.
3. A Dangerous Cook
The numbers of irrelevant sentence: 5,6,9,11,12
5) I was really looking forward the beans, for I eat nothing but canned vegetables in my dormitory.
6) I, frankly, am not much to cook either.
9) Inaddition, the meatballs were burned on the outside but almost raw inside.
11) For some reason, Tom is very good at making meat and vegetable sauces.
12) Because of Tom’s kitchen mishaps, I never eat at his place with out an Alka-Seltzed in my pocket,or without money in case we have to go out to eat.
4. Why Adult Visit Amusement Park
The numbers of irrelevant sentence: 9,10,13
9) Some rides, however, can be dangerous.
10) Rides that are not properly icspected or maintained have killed people all over the country.
13) A scary ride empties the mind of all worries-expect making it to the bottom alive.
5. My Color Television
The numbers of irrelevant sentence: 2,3,4,5
2) I was able to buy it a little over a year ago because I had my relatives give me money for my birthday insteated of a lot of clothes that wouldn’t fit.
3) My first dose of stomach acid came when I bought the set.
4) I let a saleslerk fool me into buying a discontinued model.
5) I realized this a day later, when I saw newspaper advertisements for the set at seventy-five dollars less than I had paid.

dinh thi lich Sat May 16, 2009 8:03 pm

Đinh Thị Lịch (red apples)

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR UNITY

1. A kindergarten failure

The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 3, 5

2. How to prevent cheating

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 10, 11

3. A dangerous cook

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10, 11

4. Why adults visit amusement parks

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 5, 9, 10

5. My color television

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 2, 6, 7, 12

dinh thi lich Sat May 16, 2009 8:12 pm

Đinh Thị Lịch (red apples)

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR UNITY:

1. A kindergarten failure
The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 3, 5

2. How to prevent cheating
The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 10, 11

3. A dangerous cook

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10, 11

4. Why adults visit amusement parks

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 5, 9, 10

5. My color television

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 2, 6, 7, 12

dinh thi lich Sat May 16, 2009 8:15 pm

Đinh Thị Lịch (red apples)

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR UNITY:

1. A kindergarten failure

The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 3, 5

2. How to prevent cheating

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 10, 11

3. A dangerous cook

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10, 11

4. Why adults visit amusement parks

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 5, 9, 10

5. My color television

The numbers of the irrlevent sentences: 2, 6, 7, 12

vi_diem Sat May 16, 2009 8:36 pm

NAME: VÕ THỊ VI DIỄM

1.A kindergarten failure
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 9
2. How to prevent cheating
The number of the irrelavant sentences : 6, 13
3. A dangerous cook
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10,11
4. Why adults visit Amusement park
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 5, 10, 14
5. My color television
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 2, 6, 7, 16

NAME: VĂN THỊ THỦY

1.A kindergarten failure
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 9
2. How to prevent cheating
The number of the irrelavant sentences : 6, 14
3. A dangerous cook
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5, 6, 9,11
4. Why adults visit Amusement park
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 5, 10, 14
5. My color television
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 2, 5, 7, 15

NAME: BÙI THÁI HƯỜNG

1.A kindergarten failure
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating
The number of the irrelavant sentences : 6, 10
3. A dangerous cook
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10,11
4. Why adults visit Amusement park
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 5, 8, 13
5. My color television
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 4, 5, 12

NAME: PHẠM THỊ HỒNG VƯỢNG

1.A kindergarten failure
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating
The number of the irrelavant sentences : 13, 14
3. A dangerous cook
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10,12
4. Why adults visit Amusement park
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 5, 10,12
5. My color television
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 2, 5, 12, 15

NAME: HOÀNG THỊ MƠ

1.A kindergarten failure
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 4
2. How to prevent cheating
The number of the irrelavant sentences : 10, 11
3. A dangerous cook
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 3, 5, 6, 10,11
4. Why adults visit Amusement park
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 5, 9,10
5. My color television
The number of the irrelavant sentences: 2, 5, 12, 15

vi_diem Sat May 23, 2009 4:17 pm

NAME: VĂN THỊ THUỶ
PAGE(86-87)

1. Chicken: Our best friend : 2,6
2. A car Accident : 6
3. Tips on bring Up Children : 9
4. Telephone Answering Machines : 5,10
5. Being on TV :6,10
PAGE(92-94)

1. Ponderosa Steak House :b,c,d
2. A Frustrating Moment : a,c,d
3. Asking Girls Out : a,c
4. A Change in My Writing :e
5. Luck and Me : a,b

NAME:VÕ THỊ VI DIỄM

2.A Car Accident
The point where details are clearly needed occurs after sentence number:10
The car’s surrounder was almost deforme and its hub-cab was so battered that it can’t move itself.
3. Tips on Bringing Up Children.
The spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number:9
By help them decide to chose better thing among good things and chose less worse thing among bad things.
4. Telephone Answering Machine
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 10
How can its antipathy machine voice make me get pleasant?
The second spot occurs after sentence number : 11
A human voice give me warm and cosy feeling as I was welcome by my friend’s heart.
5.Being on TV
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 6
They think they should have polite attitudes on TV.
The second spot occurs after sentence number: 10
Their manners become not to be natural as usual.
EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR ALL FOUR BASES : UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.
1. Ponderosa Steak House: b, c, d
2A Frustrating Moment: b, c.
3. Asking Girls Out: a, c. d
4. A Change in My Writing: a, c, d
5. Luck and me: a, b.

dinh thi lich Sat May 23, 2009 5:20 pm

“Red Apples” group
Đinh Thị Lịch

Paragraph 1: Ponderosa steak house
b, not adequately supported: sentence 2, 4 need to support
Support for sentence 2: Only 50,000 dong, we can to buy a kilogam of fresh chicken for our family.
Support for sentence 4: It take not much time to cook a good food from chicken instead of take many hours for others.
c, not well organized.
d, not show a command of sentence skills
Paragraph 2: A frustrating moment
b, not adequately supported: sentence 16 need to support
support for sentence 16: I felt comfortable more than about lacking care of cashier
c, not well organized
Paragraph 3: Asking girls out
a, not unified: - some sentence show about asking girls out
- some sentence show about meeting girls
b, not adequately supported: sentence 3, 9 need to support
Support for sentence 3: For example, in a party on Sunday last week, I would like to ask Mary out but I was too shy to no confidence, so I became quiet during the party.
Support for sentence 9: You are maybe nerve, shy or afraid of the bad things will happen when you are in front of your friends’s mockery.
c, not well organized
Paragraph 4: A change in my writing
b, not adequately supported: sentence 4 need to support
Support for sentence 4: I frequently writen “School” instead of “school” while it was lying among sentence, and this was one of my other mistakes.
Paragraph 5: Luck and me
a, not unified
c, not well organized
d, not show a command of sentence skills

Đinh Thị Thỏa Niềm Sat May 23, 2009 8:14 pm

EVALUATING PARAGRAPH FOR ALL FOUR BASE:
UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.
1.Ponderosa Steak House
b.The paragraph is not adequately
sentence 2,4 neeed to support
Support sentence 2: We can buy a kilogam chicken only 30,000VND.
Support sentence 4: You can cook a good food from chicken that do not need more time.
c. The paragraph is not well organized
2.A frustrating Moment
e. The paragraph is well written in term of the four bases.
3. Asking Girls Out
c. The paragraph is not well organized.
4. A Change in My Writing
c. The paragraph is not well organized
5. Luck and Me
a. The paragraph is not unifed
c. The paragraph is not well organized
d. The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skill.

ngominhthi Sat May 23, 2009 10:54 pm

Bùi Thái Hường :

Evaluating paragraphs for support
1. Chicken : Our best friend – 6
2. A car accident – 6
-Because the road was overcrowded with many vehicles
3. Tips on bring up children – 9
- For instance, they could buy style clothes or attended youthful activitives if they wanted.
4. Telephone answering machines – 9, 10
- I call for my friend to discuss about our works but he also uses them to answer, so I can't talk with him directly.
- With this things, my coworkers can contact with customer or other companies.
5. Being on TV – 8, 12
- That things makes many people to laugh cheerfully
- After they check, the result is everybody who is still watching them.

6. Evaluating paragraphs for all four bases : unity, support, coherence, and sentence skills

1. Ponderosa steak house – d
2. A frustrating moment – b
3. Asking girls out – a, c, d
4. A change in my writing – b, d.
5. Luck and me – a

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