"Home Sweet Home" group

Cổ thị Diễm Trang
1. Learning a new languages is like learning swim because of taking a lot of practice, time and a great effort.
2. A newly arrived international student faces many problems. For example, he has to cope with a new culture and adapt with the changes of time and weather. Especially, the strange food make him hard of digestion.
3. Junk food is bad for your health because it contains no vitamins and even damages your stomach. Thus, people shouldn't eat it.

RUN-ON SENTENCE
1. Learning a new language needs a lot of practice, time and a great effort. It’s also like learning to swim.
2. A newly arrived international student faces many problems. For example, he has to adapt with not only a new culture but also the changes of time and weather, especially, the digestion of strange food.
3. Junk-food not only no contains Vitamins but also damages your stomach and is bad for your health. So, people shouldn’t eat it.

1.Learning a new languge is like learning to swim. It takes a lot of practice, time and a great effort.
2.A newly arrived international student has to face many problems such as cope with a new culture, adapt with the changes of time , weather and especially the digestion of strange food.
3.Junk food is bad for your health because it not only contains no vitamins but also damages your stomach .Therefore, people shouldn’t eat it.

Phạm Bá Hưng
1. Learning a new language is like learning how to swim which takes a lot of time, practices and a great effort.
2. Coping with a new culture, adapting with the changes of time and weather or the big digestion of strange food are the problems faced by a newly arrived international student.
3. As containing no vitamins and damaging your stomach, junk food is bad for your health. Thus, people shouldn't eat it.

Name: Trương Diệu Hằng
1.Learning a new-language is like learning to swim because you must takes a lot of practice , time and great effort.
2.Some international students to Australia will be faced with many problems. For example, he has to deal with a new culture as well as he must adapt to changes of time and weather. Especially, the big problem is dealing with the strange food.
3.Junk food is bad for your health because it contains no vitamins and even damages your stomach. For reasons that the people should not eat it.

HOANG THI THU HUE
1.Learning a new language is like learning to swim. It takes a lot of practice, time, and a great effort.
2.A newly arrived international students faces many problems. For example, he has to cope with a new culture and adapt with the changes of time, weather,strange food.
3.Junk food is bad for your health. It is not only contains no vitamins but also damages your stomach.So, people shouldn't eat it.

Stress at school.
There are many reasons which cause students' stress at school. The first and the most popular reason is the study pressure. Unexpected results, unsuitable study programs, too much homework,... those can bring out the students' stress. Second, some students find that it's very difficult to integrate into their classmates, their friends... That makes them feel lonely, discouraged and don't want to go to school any more. Parents' expectance is a popular reason, too. Because parents expect too much of students, they have to try hard to achieve perfect results. Therefore, studying becomes an heavy pressure which plunges students into stress. Finally, teachers who are so strict with students can make them feel tired and unpleasant. In short, students' stress at school is caused in many ways including study pressure and thoughts and behaviors of people around them.

1. Learning a new language is like learning to swim. It takes a lot of practice, time and a great effort.
2. A newly arrived international student faces many problems. For example, he has to cope with a new culture and adapt with the changes of time and weather. Espectially, the biggest problem is the digestion of strange food.
3. Junk food is bad for your health because it not only contains no vitamins but also damages your stomach. So, people shouldn't eat it.

Name: Cổ thị Diễm Trang
The numbers of the irrelevant sentences in:
1. A kindergarten failure: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating : 10, 11
3. A dangerous cook : 3, 5, 6, 10, 11
4. Why adults visit amusement parks: 5, 9, 10
5. My color television: 2, 6, 7, 12

Name: Ngô Thị Minh Thi
The numbers of the irrelevant sentences in:
1. A kindergarten failure: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating : 10, 11
3. A dangerous cook : 3, 5, 6, 10, 11
4. Why adults visit amusement parks: 5, 9, 10
5. My color television: 2, 6, 7, 12

1. A KINDERGARTEN FAILURE
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 3,5
2.HOW TO PREVENT CHEATING
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 10,11
3.A DANGEROUS COOK
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 3,5,6,10,11
4.WHY ADULTS VISIT AMUSEMENT PARKS
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 5,9,10
5.MY COLOR TELEVISION
The numbers of irrelevant sentences:2,6,7,12

PHAMTHIHONGNHUNG

The numbers of the irrelevant sentences in:
1. A kindergarten failure: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating : 10, 11
3. A dangerous cook : 3, 5, 6, 10, 11
4. Why adults visit amusement parks: 5, 9, 10
5. My color television: 2, 6, 7, 12

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR UNITY.
1.The numbers of the irrelevant sentences: 3 , 5
2.The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 10 , 11
3.The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 3 ,5,6,10,11
4.The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 5 , 9 ,10
5.The numbers of the irrelevent sentences: 2, 6, 7 , 12

Name: Trương Diệu Hằng
The numbers of the irrelevant sentences in:
1. A kindergarten failure: 3, 5
2. How to prevent cheating : 10, 11
3. A dangerous cook : 3, 5, 9,10
4. Why adults visit amusement parks: 5, 9, 10
5. My color television: 2, 6, 7, 12

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR UNITY
1- A Kindergarten Failure: 3, 5
2- How to Prevent Cheating:10, 11
3- A Dangerous Cook: 3, 5, 6, 10, 11
4- Why Adults Visit Amusement Parks: 5, 9, 10
5- My Color Television: 2, 6, 7, 12

Pham Ba Hung
1. A Kindergarten Failure
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 3 - 5
2.How to Prevent Cheating
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 10 - 11
3.A Dangerous Cook
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 3 - 5 - 6 - 10 - 11
4.Why Adults Visit Amusement Parks
The numbers of irrelevant sentences: 5 - 9 - 10
5.MY COLOR TELEVISION
The numbers of irrelevant sentences:2 - 6 - 7 - 12

Ngô Thị Minh Thi:
3. Evaluating paragraphs for support (p 86)

1. Chicken : Our best friend – 2, 6
2. A car accident – 6
3. Tips on bring up children – 9
4. Telephone answering machines – 5, 10
5. Being on TV – 6, 10

6. Evaluating paragraphs for all four bases : unity, support, coherence, and sentence skills

1. Ponderosa steak house – d) The paragraph does not show a command of sentence skills
2. A frustrating moment – c) The paragraph is not well organized.
3. Asking girls out – a) The paragraph is not unified
4. A change in my writing – e) The paragraph is well written in terms of the four bases.
5. Luck and me – b) The paragraph is not adequately support.

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR SUPPORT.
1.Chicken: Our Best Friend
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number : 2
==>You spend just fifty thousands dong to have an one kilogramme chicken.
The second spot occurs after sentence number : 6
 It takes not much time to have a delicious chicken.
2.A Car Accident
The point where details are clearly needed occurs after sentence number:6
 That car crashed into hood of my car suddenly.
3. Tips on Bringing Up Children.
The spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number:9
 They can have the schedule of learning and playing which they like.
4. Telephone Answering Machine
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 5
 When I put through to anyone, suddenly telephone line is broken.
The second spot occurs after sentence number : 10
 He has many problems same me so he is very annoy.
5.Being on TV
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 6
==>They think they should have polite attitudes on TV.
The second spot occurs after sentence number: 10
 Their manners become not to be natural as usual.
EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR ALL FOUR BASES : UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.
1. Ponderosa Steak House: b, c
2. A Frustrating Moment: b, c.
3. Asking Girls Out: a, c.
4. A Change in My Writing: d
5. Luck and me: a, b.

Co thi Diem Trang
Evaluating paragraphs for support

1. Chicken : Our best friend : 2, 6
2. A car accident : 6
3. Tips on bring up children: 9
4. Telephone answering machines: 5, 10
5. Being on TV: 6, 10

* EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR ALL FOUR BASES :
UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.

1. Ponderosa Steak House: b, c
2. A Frustrating Moment: b, c
3. Asking Girls Out: a, c
4. A Change in My Writing: d
5. Luck and me: a, b

EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR SUPPORT
1- Chicken: Our Best Friend
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number : 2
+ You spend just fifty thousands dong to have an one kilogramme chicken.
The second spot occurs after sentence number : 6
+ It takes not much time to have a delicious chicken.
2- A Car Accident
The point where details are clearly needed occurs after sentence number: 6
+ Because he didn’t look me and his car was moving very fast.
3- Tips on Bringing Up Children
The spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 9
+ They could arrange their time to study and play suitably themselve.
4- Telephone Answering Machines
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 5
+ The telephone directory became to disorder, so I didn’t find the names which I needed.
The second spot occurs after sentence number : 10
+ He told me very many problems which were the same as me. He was also so annoy about them.
5- Being on TV
The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence number: 6
+ Because they don’t properly want people throughout the world to see their impolite attitudes on television.
The second spot occurs after sentence number: 10
+ When camera films them, they prove nothing. But they’ll return their actions as there is no any note.
EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR ALL FOUR BASES : UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.
1. Ponderosa Steak House: b, c
2. A Frustrating Moment: b, c.
3. Asking Girls Out: a, c.
4. A Change in My Writing: d
5. Luck and me: a, b.

Pham Ba Hung
EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR SUPPORT
1- Chicken: Our Best Friend: 2 - 6
2 - Even a low-paid worker can eat chicken with just four or five dollars.
6 - To buy chicken, all you have to do is walking for five minutes to the nearest convenience store.
2- A Car Accident : 6
6 - All I heard was a loud sound then the airbag deployed and knocked off my glasses.
3- Tips on Bringing Up Children: 9
9 - Making simple decisions by the children themselves makes them feel confident and independent.
4- Telephone Answering Machines: 5 - 10
5 - My friend sent me a message and all I could hear was a big buzz.
10 - His stupid tape tricked me so many times and he seemed to like it a lot.
5- Being on TV: 6 - 10
6 - All they can do are keeping their eyes away from the cameras and staying unnoticed.
10 - their faces are so tense and unnatural.
EVALUATING PARAGRAPHS FOR ALL FOUR BASES : UNITY, SUPPORT, COHERENCE, AND SENTENCE SKILLS.
1 - b
2 - c
3 - a
4 - e
5 - b

Name: Trương Diệu Hằng
1. Chicken : Our best friend – 2, 6
2. A car accident – 6
3. Tips on bring up children – 9
4. Telephone answering machines – 5, 10
5. Being on TV – 6, 10
6. Evaluating paragraphs for all four bases : unity, support, coherence, and sentence skills